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people make their way into the coffee house

old man, creased face
thoughts of times 40 years back
breathing here, living there

kids laughing and giggling
their drinks are fruity and sweet
whipped cream drips

crossing guard sips
brown hair hides strands of gray
recuperating from the kids

laptop guy surfing
coffee cold and barely touched
ear piece and cell close

chi latte to go
perfumed woman smiling
too cute and happy

dress shirts and laptops
professionals in a meeting
energy drinks

man sitting outside
trying to catch someone's eye
same coffee same spot

busta the pit bull
walking its owner to the shop
lean muscular, massive head

big eyes peering
pink feet poking out of a stroller
soundless laughter

on a smoke break
twenty-something unshaven
rubbernecking every female

two cent opinions
coffee house philosophy
five dollar coffee

Good Poem

Posted by Anonymous User at 2006-04-05 02:54 PM
I've read this one before, but I think you made some changes to it, it seems a lot tighter and I like it more. Or maybe I just like it even better the second time.

— Lisa

much different

Posted by Aaron Payne at 2006-04-05 07:04 PM
Lisa,

You saw an early version. I cut out many parts and made glimpes of each different thought.

Aaron